The worst lead in paragraph for a fishing article I've read in a

In the writing game, we learn quickly that the first paragraph in any story, column or article is the most important. How then, does someone put this sentence at the beginning of an article on yesterday's Everstart Clear Lake event?

"Using a catch of 24 pounds, 10 ounces, Sieg Taylor of Clearlake, Calif., failed to relinquish the top spot on the leaderboard for the third day in the row."

He certainly AVOIDED relinquishing the lead, but how can anyone familiar with the English langause equate that with a FAILURE? "Fail" implies that he did not accomplish his goals. I'd hate to see what they would have written about him is he HAD relinquished the lead!

RichZ

Mar 12
2005

Yes, I don't think so, Rich. -- Steve ;-)

Steve

Mar 12

You're right, of course, but no way does that person deserve to be called a "writer."

Marty

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